The UGLY!
Ok, being as we have discussed the Good, the bad, one thing remaining is “The Ugly.” I call this the ugly because these are “Cliché” plot devices put in to contrive the story away from controversy that makes people uncomfortable, or make a shallow “14 year old view” of what sex is. In other words, UNREALISTIC.
I. The Oral Anal Vaginal Myth.
In my opinion, this is a “Video Porn Industry” contrivance, meant to hold the attention of the average 14 year old who can’t get an actual date. Let’s face it, most porn flicks are not intellectual masterpieces, and there are strict rules for real life actors. The only way they could get the viewer to watch to the end is the ANTICPATON of seeing them go all the way, BUT THAT IS NOT REALISTIC, especially in a written story where the reader can just jump to the end.
Why is it not realistic? Well first, and guys, weigh in on this, *I* am a guy, if a villain has an beautiful unconscious woman he wishes to get pleasure from he’s going STRAIGHT to her cunt…there are some VERY good reasons…
· A cunt does NOT have teeth that can BITE a very sensitive part of male anatomy
· This is what a cunt was designed for
· Anal sex DOES ten to leave the male rather…dirty?
Now this does not mean the male villain has to always go for the pussy first, but you DO have to have some well thought out justification.
· Villain is in a weak enough position he does not want to leave DNA evidence
· Mind control
· Blackmail or seduction
II. Anal sex or “pulling out” as a form of birth control or using a condom.
Ok, let us examine your villain. Powerful, intelligent, cunning. A murder, a rapist, a white slaver dominant. And you want me to believe he is concerned if he knocks up his arch enemy? He will take time to get out a Trojan and roll it down? Again, you can make your villain sympathetic to his enemy, or just not want to have children, but explain and establish that. (But remember you cannot later have him decide to throw caution to the wind with somone LESS exciting then his adversary.
III. Make the sex REALISTIC
· Rape is NOT a bad word, you can use it in the story
· The PURPOSE of sex is PREGNANCY. You cannot have endless sex, and she NEVR conceives.
o Pregnancy is a VERY good way to get a heroine out of the way for 9 mos min
o Pregnancy definitely changes the heroine
· The VILLIAN, who is likely a womanizer, has had more practice and very PROBALY is a BETTER love maker then the victims “true love” in the physical sense
· Tell me again, WHY is the dominant evil mind controlling villain, placing his mouth on the woman pussy? Or ass hole?
o Please do not “mind control” the heroine only to discover your making her do “what she always dreamed of doing” (can you say COP OUT!)
o Performing oral on a woman is an act of CARING, if you want to do it…make the Villain actually in love with her, but if he’s in love with her. Remember that shuts other doors. He can hardly “love’ her and then want to humiliate her.
· The Devil is in the details Know your audience
o DESCRIBE don’t tell
§ The 5 senses truth vs fiction
· If you want to “punish” the heroine, describe stint, bad taste
· If you want to corrupt it’s OK to use “bland terms” (salty, earthy, musky)
§ Detail vs Minutia
· Too much detail and your reader could get board, or turned off
· Describing scenes that let the reader know WHAT is happening but not HOW, allows the reader to fill in what THEY would most like to see.
o 10 dicks and HUGE tits
§ Everyone thinks describing these cocks, and the idea of a perfect women, 2 tits the size of the world trade center with 2 tiny little legs….Don’t just describe the PARTS…describe the ACTION.
· Facts, a few facts educates your reader and makes the fiction better, but choose wisely grasshopper
o Chloroform
§ Does not ACTUALLY act quickly
§ Can stop the heart
§ Burns the skin
o Hypnosis and Mind control
§ Again do not Use mind control to discover the victim is actually willing
§ Do not make it too powerful, or the villain would just solve EVERYTHING by mind control
IV. Tell me again why you’re beating her?
Ok, I do not GET this one. If your villain hates her, and wants nothing but to cause her pain and death, ok, but who wants to make love to a bloody mess? Talk about breaking yer toy. Punishment is one thing but disfiguring?
V. The villain so bad EVERYONE wants him dead.
Basic math here. If there is only a million to one chance that your villain can be defeated or killed, and he is so evil and brutal his two million slaves would rather die than suffer any more. Guess what it’s two to one in FAVOR of your villain being defeated. Don’t make him stupid!
VI. Shame vs Humiliation
Try to use the terms correctly, I find many people use the words wrong in an attempt to force the reader to feel the desire emotion it WON’T work
· Humiliation- comes from the inability to prevent a “perceived” taboo actand is EXTERNAL it is something your villain can force on the victim. For example, stripping her naked and forcing her to walk naked down the street is humiliating. Everyone could see she could not resist him.
· Shame- Comes from performing a perceived taboo act willingly and is INTERNAL. It is what the victim FEELs as a result of their own short comings. She was ashamed she lost the fight, allowing the villain to strip her naked and walk down the street. Her shame was losing the fight, not being forced. A more USEFUL example, is the woman who experiences an orgasm during rape. This is a common REAL LIFE emotion as a woman rationalizes this was an act against her will she should not FEEL pleasure (which is purely physiological)
VII. BE CAREFUL how you guide your readers emotions
· Heroine breaks down into sobs and “just wanted to help people” (a very “realistic” response) the average reader sympathizes with the Heroine and despises the antagonist.
· Heroine struggles and loses to a “mind-blowing” climax (a healthy fiction) the average reader tends to sympathize more with the antagonist